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You are sleeping. You wake to hear your phone ring. No one else seems to wake up. You get out of bed and reach for the phone, hold it to your ear and you hear nothing. As you hang up you hear a noise. You turn around to see.............
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Submitted by Brian Grady

...martian. She is lying dead on the floor. You click on the body, then realise that what you just did proves that the world is a computer game. Oh well. You find your legs taking you to the body, then a piece of paper appears in a nearby inventory panel. You read it. It says:
"Dear Squeeng,
You have been invited to a toast to the Martian-Historic Earthling alliance. Meet in the b*** ***** ******** ** *** ***** ******** ****esque pr******** *** ** **** *** **** *ug s***
Best wishes,
*******.
(the *s represent figures blurred by blood.)
A voice booms behind you. "You will pay the price for the death of Squeeng!"
"But I didn't kill her." you object.
"Your voice. It is familiar. ECRESES, YOU FIEND! I WILL DEFINATELY KILL YOU!"
He pulls a martian plasma-pistol from his hat, and fires.
You die.
You respawn in...

B+ plus a few comments

Submitted by Christopher Jury

???????
What kind of world is this?
Respawning?

Tsk, tsk.

Anyway.....

You respawn in the exactly place as in Story A,
Intersection!

Officially Signed and Most Graciously Authenticated, His Most Imperial and Royal Majesty, Christophe Wilhelm the Twelfth, by the Grace of God, Deutsch Kaiser and King of Prussia, The Imperial Supreme Ruler Emperor of The Great German Empire and Grand Kaiser of The Mighty German Armed Forces

absurdist anarchy

Submitted by Wild Kid Nick

Brian seems to specialise in the absurdiist anarchical narrative style in which apparent connectedness is contradicted by it's negation. When I'm going to die I'll enter Brian's world

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Submitted by Brian Grady

I do? I usually specialise in other things, this must be a one-timer.
"MOLOCH? I JUST KILLED THE MOLOCH!"
"Ah, but did you?"
"YES I FREAKING WELL DID!"
"Ah, but did you?"
"Sir, you are freaking me out!"
"Ah, but what about the Moloch?"
"MAYBE YOU'RE THE MOLOCH!"
"Ah, but what about the dust particle that just floated by?"
"DUST PARTICLE? I JUST KILLED THE DUST PARTICLE!"
"Ah, but did you?"
"No, I magically turned into a rhubarb!"
"Ah, but did you?"
"I was being sarcastic!"
"Ah, but were you? Take another look."
"Look? At what?"
"Me."
"Oh my god! You're the Moloch after all!"
"Ah, but am I?"
An extract from a story I never wrote.

fortunate for the reader

Submitted by Wild Kid Nick

Perhaps it is fortunate for readers that you focused on other more important stuff than completing the above story.

Nicholas

I like that story.

Submitted by Christopher Jury

MOLOCH & SELF-REFERENTIALISM

Submitted by Wild Kid Nick

MOLOCH - Canaanite God to whom children were sacrificed - so does the story refer to a self-referential sacrifice? The dictionary goes onto say it is a tyrannical object of sacrifice [ordering it's own destruction] but is also a spiny slow-moving grotesque looking Austral. reptile [Moloch horridus].

I think the Moloch idol is one that Elijah famously destroys in the OT.
There's also a great picture called 'Moloch' about a day in Hitler's life at the mountain home during WW11 . [it may be R-something]

For self-referential material, check out books by Douglas Hofstadter, esp. the one entilted 'Godel, Escher & Bach etc.'. & read the short stories of Jorge Luis Borges.

Finally, Brian has an absurdist approach to writing that I like - I was prob. a little harsh on the piece above - but I don't think it would have a wide audience!

Moloch?

Submitted by Brian Grady

Hmmmmm...
The type I know of is similar to the third one, just a bit more
Ohhhh!

BELIARH? NOT THIS HOLE IN THE BUCKET ROUTINE AGAIN!
No, Bertramicus, no. This one's different.
DIFFERENT? I JUST KILLED THE DIFFERENCE!
Hush! You'll wake his corpse as an undead.
UNDEAD? I JUST KILLED THE UNDEAD!
Which one?
THE GOD-DAMN BELIARH SKELETON!
Skeleton? He was no skeleton.
HE IS NOW!
That's because his flesh is decaying!
EARTHWORM? I JUST KILLED THE EARTHWORM!
An extract from the same story I never wrote, nor did anyone else.

Hang on...

Submitted by Brian Grady

My last comment has things missing from it for some reason: In between 'more' and 'ohhhhhhh', as well as after 'decaying'.
I won't edit it, I have to go.